Separate names with a comma.
Discussion in 'DIRECTV - H24/HR24 Field Trial (private)' started by Stuart Sweet, Feb 3, 2010.
This is a great new look, and the content is well laid out.
Page 2 - You use the term "Category 5 Ethernet". Would "Cat-5 Ethernet" be more understandable.
Page 3 - "one composite RCA video outputs" should be "output".
Page 5 - need end quote after the "pimped out" statement.
Page 5 - 2 periods in the sidebar after "simpler".
Page 7 - Paragraph that begins "Once the setup beings...", in the last sentence, the initial "once" should be capitalized.
Page 7 - Paragraph that begins "By selecting anyone of...", "anyone" should be two words.
Page 7 - Same paragraph as above "lets say" should have an apostrophe. Also, should "let's say" be separated out by commas or parenthesis?
Page 7 - Same paragraph, near the end, there is another instance of "anyone" rather than any one. Comma after "AV1" and before "and" in the same sentence.
Page 7 - Next paragraph, the 3rd and 4th sentences need commas before the "and".
Page 7 - Next paragraph, there should be a comma and not a period after menu.
Page 7 - Paragraph after ordered list, "caution" should be capitalized.
Page 7 - Paragraph that starts "This is all that is needed...", "2 way" should be "2-way" to be consistent with top of page. "Answer" should not be capitalized. Last sentence, a comma after "questions" and "remote". In the same sentence, the "and" after questions could be removed.
Absolutely Fantastic!! A new bar has been set for First Looks.
Stuart, very nicely done. I saw in the one writeup refereing to Tom coming back with the NXP chipset informaiton. I would scratch that out in the final release.
I thought the layout is fantastic man, wow!
Awesome job, all!
Rotate pictures of receivers so they are level. Line up the three lines of text between the two receivers so they start at the same point from the left and possibly lower the center line so it's evenly spaced between the top and bottom lines.
In the Basic Specs section, will the H24 program the two-way remote? If so, no changes, otherwise add (HR24) after 2-way remote programming.
Standardize DIRECTV to uppercase. I would leave out all apostrophes when referring to plural DVRs or HR2xs except when referencing the H24's ability to act as a(n) MRV client. The apostrophe is correct there.
Standardize DIRECTV to uppercase. Backlit doesn't need a hyphen. Direct channel changes with the remote are quick and accurate. Aren't there two satellite inputs on the box as well? LameLefty indicates that there is only one.
Some missing capitalization and some misspells.
Standardize DIRECTV to uppercase. disappointed spelled incorrectly.
Looks great. I really like the new look.
Some initial comments:
-I am curious what the 3rd photo down on the right int he H24 section is though? It is of the bottom but looks completely different than my unit and the one above it. Were some people's bottoms different?
-Also the H24 being so tilted looks kinda funny to me on the cover page, but possibly you intended to have it like that? That picture also really shows a lot of scratches.
-I think the "Is it really that much faster?" section needs a bit more formatting. It is a bit confusing as it is displayed now. Some bolding and organization could make it a lot more clear with the same info there. In the same section I would put HR on the models as well to be clear since this first look has the H24 as well (even though it is a different manufacturer number).
Overall awesome stuff though as usual. The new format looks great and is easy to read.
Grentz, that's the inside shielding of the H24.
I am going to replace the H24 photo on the front.
And I'll look at that last section... I was in a rush.
Well, you used all that bloviation from that "LameLefty" guy . . . :nono:
Okay, seriously . . . in my part of the writeup, remove the NXP reference unless Tom CAN verify it, and if he can, remove the text about him verifying it. :lol:
Um, and after my daughter's "pimped out" quote, there should be closed quotation marks.
Other than that, it looks good to me at first blush. :up:
Ok that makes sense. Was just a bit confusing in the small pic.
Sounds good on the others, I try to be critical and throw stuff out there...overall it looks great!
Just let me/us know if you need anything else to work with.
On page 5 paragraph 4 says ... but there is only one satellite input ...
The picture on page 6 shows 2
I do not have an HR24 so I do not know which is correct.
It also looks like everyone found any corrections that need made.
Ok, here is an idea for the last section. I dunno if you guys will like it or not, but I thought I would throw it out there.
I also removed the HR20 as it adds confusion IMO and the data was not very clear for it in the channel change test.
Is it really that much faster? Check out this data:
First entering a channel's 3 digits and waiting for the receiver to change to that channel completely was tested. The HR21-100 averaged 8.3 seconds and the HR24-500 averaged 7.2 seconds.
Next, flipping through the guide was tested using page down. Twenty "flips" were executed on each receiver and the time it took was recorded. The HR21-100 averaged 12.6 seconds while the HR24-500 averaged 7.4 seconds. If you push and hold the page down button, after the first two page downs the HR24 flies while the HR21 still sputters.
Note: Scrolling Effects, which usually slow down guide scrolling when on, were ON for the HR24-500 and OFF for the HR21-100. Both receivers were tested via remotes in RF mode.
NICE - I like it!
Nice chart... But it needs to show how many (channel changes and guide flips).
Yes, it does.....the graphical look adds a nice flair thought.
That can be added easily. I will wait to see if there is any more interest/ideas for changes before throwing together another version. Some of the things are a bit out of line as well as I whipped it together pretty quickly.
Glad you guys like it.
Wow Stuart - very nice! I love the more "edgy" graphical layout. It makes these devices look and feel ultra-cool and "futuristic".
On Page 1, would you like to try an alternate H24 picture? I pulled out the background from azarby's photo to use in the video and I posted the alpha .psd here if you want to try it. http://files.me.com/element242/ziloy8
It doesn't have the scuffing that the current one does, but don't know if the orientation would work for you or not.
On page 2 pointing to the video, do you want the text to read "YouTube" instead of "Youtube", or do you want to maybe put the YouTube logo in there?
Nice job - I love it
Looks great. Wish I was a better author or photographer to help you guys out more, but Ill stick with the beta testing I guess, since Im good at that Congrats.
no mention of wall mount on H24?
Ooh, good point, especially since Earl specifically asked about it a couple days ago. :sure:
Ok. I had a little more time to look this over. Here's what I have so far...
-Page 2: In video window, change "Youtube" to "YouTube"
-Page 3: 2nd paragraph, 6th sentence - "it's" should be "its"
-Page 3: 3rd paragraph, 4th sentence - add an "a" before "Phone Jack"
-Page 3: 4th paragraph, 2nd sentence - add a comma after "H24"
-Page 3: 5th paragraph, 3rd sentence - How does DECA solution mean one less coax? Maybe one less cable is better here.
-Page 3: 6th paragraph, 4th sentence - "act as an MRV client"
-Page 4: 3rd paragraph, last sentence - Close quotation
-Page 4: 6th paragraph, 6th sentence - "with a remote are quick and accurate"
-Page 7: 1st paragraph, 3rd sentence - replace period after menu with a comma; un-capitalize the I in it
-Page 7: 3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence - Capitalize "once"
-Page 7: 5th paragraph, 1st sentence - "anyone" should be "any one"
-Page 7: 5th paragraph, 1st sentence - Capitalize "once"
-Page 7: 5th paragraph, 2nd sentence - put a comma after "Setup AV1" and un-capitalize the t in the
-Page 7: 5th paragraph, 2nd sentence - "anyone" should be "any one"
-Page 7: 6th paragraph, 1st sentence - "This" should be capitalized
-Page 7: 7th paragraph, 1st sentence - "has" should be "have"
-Page 7: 7th paragraph, 1st sentence - put comma after "menu"
-Page 7: 8th paragraph, 3rd sentence - In #2, drop the "be" after "a message will"
-Page 7: 8th paragraph, 3rd sentence - Put quotations around "ok"
-Page 7: 9th paragraph, 1st sentence - Capitalize "caution"
-Page 7: 10th paragraph, 1st sentence - put comma after "begins"
-Page 7: 12th paragraph, 1st sentence - hyphenate "2 way"
-Page 7: 12th paragraph, 2nd & 3rd sentence - Would rework to read: "Just answer a couple of questions, point the remote, and the receiver takes all of the guess work out."